Editing examples

Untangle your words and express your messages clearly

If would like to bring out the best in your work, contact Cinden.

She can give your work a final polish with a copy edit that ensures accurate and consistent style, spelling and grammar.

Or she can lift your work to the next level with a more substantive edit that also provides detailed structural, language and content suggestions.

Cinden is very familiar with the Style manual for authors, editors and printers (preferred government style).

Her experience includes editing a wide range of material for both government and the private sector including:

  • annual reports, other reports and information publications
  • website content
  • guidelines and corporate materials
  • fact sheets and brochures
  • blogs, tweets and other social media content
  • newsletters, articles and case studies
  • submissions and position statements.

Here are just some examples of past work. Note, government department names were correct at the time.

Substantive and copy edits

CrimTrac AR

 

 

 

 

Comcare guide substantive1

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DoC corporate plan 2014-17

    • Annual reports—Editing the Renewable Energy Target Administrative Report (2014 and 2015) including providing advice on enhancing the structure and language to create a more engaging report. Also editing the Clean Energy Regulator Annual Report 2014–15, CrimTrac Annual Reports (2013–14 and 2014–2015) and associated case studies to help lift the draft so it told a more engaging story about the agency and its work, with less formal language and reduced repetition. While the aim was to ‘humanise’ the report, it was important to retain a style and tone appropriate for the agency and for a tabled document. See Writing examples for details about writing/editing the award-winning Australian Crime Commission (ACC) annual reports, noting that from 1 July 2016 the ACC and CrimTrac merged to become the Australian Criminal Intelligence Commission.
    • National Ice Taskforce Final Report—Editing the final report of the National Ice Taskforce to ensure a strong narrative with clear key messages, logical structure, minimal repetition, and consistent style and voice.
    • Business development strategy—Editing the ACT’s 2015 business development strategy for consistent voice and style, clear and engaging language and accurate grammar, spelling and punctuation.
    • Intranet content—Reviewing the the Fair Work Ombudsman’s People/HR intranet content, recommending a more user-friendly structure and editing or rewriting content.
    • Website content—Reviewing background information and editing website content for several small businesses and consulting companies.
    • Expression of interest—Reviewing background information, writing sections and editing other sections of a registration of interest bid for a local commercial development alliance.
    • Guide—Editing Comcare’s Working for recovery: Suitable employment for return to work following psychological injury guide for clarity, consistency, style, and accurate spelling, grammar and punctuation. Also tidied up formatting to help prepare the document for design.
    • Governance framework—Editing a governance framework for the Safety, Rehabilitation and Compensation Commission to check for clarity, consistency, logical flow, accurate spelling, grammar and punctuation, and to add summary boxes with key points for each chapter.
    • National strategy—Editing CrimTrac’s national strategy on identity resolution to ensure the language was active, clear and more meaningful, as well as editing for consistent style and accurate spelling, grammar and punctuation.
    • Research reports—Editing research papers (about media and migration, and comparative research on voluntary return and reintegration) for the Department of Immigration and Border Protection to ensure consistent voice, tone and style, clarity of expression, and accurate spelling, grammar and punctuation. Also edited a background paper on security sector reform trends in conflict-affected states for the Australian Civil-Military Centre.
    • Inquiry report—Editing the Northern Territory’s Stella Maris Inquiry Report for appropriate style and tone for a public report, clear expression, logical flow, consistency and accurate grammar, spelling and punctuation.
    • Strategic framework and guides—Providing advice, editing and writing services for the Australian Federal Police to assist with a strategic framework and guides for international police development work. This included reviewing and advising on improving draft material from a communications perspective, as well as writing, editing and rewriting as required.  
    • Public reports—Providing substantive editing for AUSTRAC’s Money laundering in Australia 2011, including rewriting sections as needed for logical flow, consistency, clarity and accessibility to a wide audience. 
    • Corporate documents—Editing and rewriting sections of the Department of Communications’ Corporate Plan 2014–17 for clarify, consistency and public presentation. Subsequently engaged to engaged to edit a range of supporting corporate strategies related to organisational change. Also rewriting the 2011–13 corporate plan and writing a short introductory brochure outlining the department’s role and responsibilities, to add creative flair and ensure they were succinct, engaging, easy to read and appealing to the intended audiences.
    • Portfolio Budget Statements—Editing and writing major sections of the Department of Communications Portfolio Budget Statement 2014–15.
    • Flagship reports—Editing the Australian Crime Commission flagship reports such as Organised Crime in Australia 2011 and the 2009–10 and 2010–11 Illicit Drug Data Report for clarity, consistency and accessibility to a wide audience. Also edited a range of other publications for clarity, consistency, and accurate style, grammar and spelling. 
    • Response manual—Editing the Australian Customs and Border Protection Service publication, Protecting Australia’s Border and Australian Maritime Counter-Terrorism Response Manual for clarity, style and accessibility to wide audience. 
    • Booklets and reports—Providing substantive and copy edits of a range of documents for the Department of Families, Housing, Community Services and Indigenous Affairs including Keys to Living Together booklets; Engaging fathers in child and family services: participation, perceptions and good practice; Evaluation of the Stronger Families and Communities Strategy 2000–2004 Final Report; and the Quality Strategy Toolkit for Disability Employment and Rehabilitation Services. 
    • Strategic vision—Providing substantive editing of the Strategic Vision for Government use of ICT 2020 for plain, engaging English, reduced repetition, clarity of expression and messaging and consistent style. Also editing the Report of the ICT Professional and Skills Development Taskforce; Responsive Government: A New Service Agenda (the 2006–2010 e-Government strategy) and the Australian Government ICT Investment Framework, for the Australian Government Information Management Office. 
    • Style guides—Reviewing, editing, updating and writing style guides for various government agencies including Defence Housing Australia, Department of Communications, Clean Energy Regulator and the Australian Crime Commission. The aim was to produce guides that ensure professional, consistent written material (including writing for the web) and visual communication.
    • Online resource kit for community events—Edited the National Australia Day Council community resource kit for accuracy, clarity, consistency, reduced repetition and easy-to-understand language.  
    • Australian Public Service Reports—Editing reports for the Australian Public Service Commission including Note for file, the Management Advisory Committee report on record keeping and records management within the Australian Public Service (also drafted a short summary flyer to highlight key points), and the Building better governance report which provides guidelines on governance within the Australian Public Service. 
    • Information and marketing materials—Editing annual reports, fact sheets, website and CD-ROM content for PSMA Australia, a leading source of spatial mapping data. 
    • Newsletters—Editing content for the Department of Education and Training’s newsletter, editing various editions of On the Wire, the former journal of the National Film and Sound Archive, and editing and writing articles for Artbeat, the former journal of the Department of Communications, Information Technology and the Arts. 
    • Exhibition catalogue—Editing Reveries: Photography & Mortality exhibition essay/catalogue for the National Portrait Gallery. 
    • Guide for business—Editing the first edition of Selling to the Australian Government: a guide for business. This involved comprehensive editing including restructuring and rewriting the original guide to make it more logical and client-focused (Department of Finance). 
    • Staff resource/guidelines—Editing the Complaint Investigation Guidelines. This included reviewing, restructuring and editing/rewriting to create a more user-friendly online resource for staff (Commonwealth Ombudsman).